Saturday Check-in: all about the readathon

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Hello my lovely fellow story seekers!

When you got into a relationship (platonic or romantic), did you find yourself starting to like things you never thought you’d like? Or initially disliked but grew to like it? That’s me right now with the band Dance Gavin Dance. I have a pretty broad musical taste–regardless of genre, I’m looking for a hook in the music–but the most hardcore I ever really went was Three Days Grace in high school. I wasn’t initially down with DGD but the more I listened… honestly, the music is really clever and I like the dude’s voice. So lo and behold, I have eleven of their songs in my playlists now. Go figure.

So I have been pushing myself. Now that I have complete control over my schedule, I’ve been filling it with goals and I am so, so, so pleased to report that I have been killing it!

My self-imposed readathon

If you follow me on Instagram, you’ll know that I have recently decided to make a desperate push on the unread books on my shelves. I’m planning to move states by the end of the year and LET–ME–TELL–YOU. I have so many unread books on my shelves.

But I don’t want to haul them 1,000 miles when I might not even want to keep them in the end BUT I do want to read them.

Easiest way to go about this conundrum? Please line up shortest to longest, folks.

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I can’t even tell y’all how many books I own that I haven’t read. Or, rather, I can but I dare not from shame. Can we just agree that it’s for the best that I don’t work at a bookstore anymore (where I got a 30% employee discount?)

What I’ve read this week

If you follow me on Goodreads, you may have seen these already. By the way, how often do you read reviews? Do you read them at all? I’m curious.

Currently reading

I’m still reading…

  • Muse of Nightmares by Laini Taylor (it’s fallen by the wayside but I will finish it!)
  • The Priory of the Orange Tree by Samantha Shannon (can’t believe I made it 300 pages in, but it took me so long to get there that it has to go back to the library already *cry*)

And I started and will soon finish…

Are you doing the Goodreads Reading Challenge by the way? My goal this year is for 50 books. I’m five books behind at the moment but this push will get me caught up in no time.

The rest of the books in the readathon

So I started with the shortest books first: I pulled down all the books under 250 pages. You know how many I have unread that are just under 250 pages? Eleven.

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To just get through the books under 250 pages, here’s what I hope to finish by the end of September:

  • A Wrinkle in Time by Madeline L’Engle
  • Matilda by Roald Dahl
  • Over Sea, Under Stone by Susan Cooper
  • The Dark is Rising by Susan Cooper
  • Jacob Have I Loved by Katherine Paterson
  • Stardust by Neil Gaiman
  • The Girl Who Circumnavigated Fairyland in a Ship of her own Making by Catherynne Valente
  • The Dark Tower by Stephen King

So I knocked out three (almost four) in a week! There’s hope for me yet.

Blog recap

So this week was a light week in terms of posts (just the one) but since the last check-in, I’ve published:

Next week will be about how I did with my writing these past few weeks. I am SO PSYCHED about it!

How many books do you own that you haven’t read yet?

Breaking Down the First Chapter #AuthorToolboxBlogHop

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First chapters are far and away the most crucial part of your story because if the person who just picked your book up off the shelf or clicked on Amazon’s “Look Inside!” feature (because hello 21st century) was enamored enough by the summary to make it this far, it’s time to show them what you’ve got, that the summary wasn’t kidding around when it said this book was a “rich classic in the making” and will “absolutely stun you.”

Full disclaimer: if you’re currently drafting, I wouldn’t recommend reading this. Or, if you’re a curious or particularly masochistic soul, I recommend not taking any of this advice too seriously at the moment. Wait until you’ve got your Editor Hat™ on and then come see me. Because drafting is not the time to be agonizing over whether or not your first chapter takes off from the gate like a thoroughbred on race day, you know?


For this exercise, let’s take a look at and break down the first chapter of The Priory of the Orange Tree by Samantha Shannon (Bloomsbury, 2019).

The opening line(s)

It seems to be an instinct born in every future writer the debilitating anxiety of crafting the perfect opening line. “You have to hook the reader!” they all cry. “You must establish tone! You must…” (this is where I lose them as I fade away into anxiety attack-induced unconsciousness.)

I was fortunate to attend Kevin Hearne‘s keynote presentation to the students of the Writing Popular Fiction MFA program at Seton Hill University this past January. His talk was about cracking the first chapter. He says the first line needs to do one thing and one thing only: inspire curiosity.

The stranger came out of the sea like a water ghost, barefoot and wearing the scars of his journey. He walked as if drunk through the haze of mist that clung like spidersilk to Seiiki.

The Priory of the Orange Tree by Samantha Shannon

In these opening lines, we already know that 1) this isn’t from the point of view of the man coming out of the sea but rather from someone elsewhere watching him emerge from the water; so who is the watcher? 2) what happened to this man that he bears “the scars of his journey”? 3) where did he come from and under what circumstances? Shipwreck? Mutiny? Freak accident?

And then we know some world building stuff like this is a world where there are water ghosts and silk doesn’t come from silkworms like in our world but rather from spiders. It’s also a country called Seiiki.

Now that our curiosity has been inspired, what’s next?

The conflict

In his Masterclass, award-winning screenwriter Aaron Sorkin talks about how he can’t start any story without first knowing the intention and obstacle. Honestly I need this tattooed on the inside of my forearm where I can reference it at any time.

Let’s look at the way Samantha Shannon presents conflict. Her POV character has discovered a stranger coming out of the sea and we already have a sense that this is bad but then we start to learn why.

On the first page, here’s what we learn:

  • the stranger’s intention is to speak with the Warlord of Seiiki
  • the stranger’s obstacle is that the POV character, Tané, holds a knife on him

Then we come to paragraph eight, which carries us over onto page two, that tells us both Tané’s intention and her obstacle:

She dared not speak, for to show she knew his language was to forge a link between them, and to betray herself. To betray the fact that just as she was now a witness to his crime, he was a witness to hers.

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Now we’ve learned:

  • her intention is to keep her crime hidden
  • her obstacle is this stranger being a witness as well as a liability

Also, our minds are exploding with questions: she’s committed a crime? Why is it a crime? And why is it a crime that he washed ashore?

We quickly learn that the reason for her anxiety is that she’s supposed to be in seclusion in preparation for her Choosing Day. She cannot be caught out or else she’ll be considered tainted.

But in a brilliant stroke of raising the stakes, it isn’t just Tané herself at risk. We learn about the fear of the “red sickness” that she’s afraid this outsider must have. This could be seen as a bad omen. Now, if she were caught with this outsider, not only would she be considered tainted for having left her seclusion, but the bad omen would condemn her entire generation of apprentices to miss the opportunity to become riders (of what? We aren’t told yet.)

Tension builds as she wrestles with herself. “If she turned this outsider over to the authorities, she would have to reveal that she had broken seclusion.” What is she going to do?

She could not report him. Neither could she abandon him. If he did have the red sickness, letting him roam unchecked would endanger the entire island.

There was only one choice.

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So we have a character, Tané, who has a lot going for her in life and a big day of her to follow and here comes this stranger to screw everything up. What does she do? What is she willing to risk to protect herself and what she wants?

We then come to a section break. She makes her choice: blindfolding the stranger (careful not to touch him) and guiding him through the city towards a point where she can leave him for another to smuggle him across an inlet to an island close by called Orisima. It’s obvious this is a huge risk for her to take. As readers, this tells us a lot about her.

There’s another section break and we meet a new character as the POV changes: Niclays Roos, who is quickly established as a grumpy old hermit on the island of Orisima. Conflict develops further as the smuggler tries to foist the stranger off on him but he refuses.

“No.” Niclays stared. “Saint, woman, are you trying to involve me in a smuggling operation?” He fumbled for the door. “I cannot hide a trespasser. If anyone knew–“

“One night.”

“One night, a year–our heads will be sliced from our shoulders regardless. Good evening.”

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So now we get that this is a big deal for all involved.

Niclays isn’t given a choice. The smuggler promises silver and simply leaves the stranger behind. The stranger and Niclays have a conversation wherein we learn a few more things like 1) the stranger is from a different country called Inys; 2) that his name is Triam Sulyard; 3) he and Niclays have different religions and countries of origin; and 4) that Triam is on a dire mission for the sake of his queen, who doesn’t know anything about it. Niclays has great contempt for all of this, as he doesn’t consider anything worth the risk to himself.

And then the cliffhanger:

In the street, there was no sign of the sentinels, but several of his neighbors had gathered. Niclays joined them. […]

An enormous head towered of the fence of Orisima. It belonged to a creature born of jewel and sea. […]

A dragon. Even as it rose over Cape Hisan, others were ascending from the water, leaving a chill mist in their wake. Niclays pressed a hand to the drumbeat in his chest.

“Now, what,” he murmured, “are they doing here?”

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The character(s)

A few givens about conflict: it cannot exist in a vacuum. It isn’t conflict unless it affects somebody. So presenting conflict means presenting characters and why this development is a conflict for them.

Tané is an apprentice about to face her Choosing Day. If she’s caught, she’ll lose her entire future. We can sympathize with such an agonizing decision: she doesn’t want to kill this stranger, for all that she holds a knife on him, but she has so much to lose because of him. And Niclays, a crotchety old doctor, will be executed if someone so much as suspects him of housing an outsider.

We have respect for Tané for risking the futures of her entire class of potential riders for the sake of this stranger and in contrast, we rather dislike Niclays for thinking only of himself when the choice is put to him.

Samantha Shannon essentially asks the reader: what would you do in this situation? This question keeps us involved as the conflict develops because it’s stressful.

In conclusion

There are three big things Samantha Shannon does with this opening chapter:

  1. establishes three main players, what they want, and why they can’t have it
  2. a glimpse of a much wider tension-filled conflict that spans the seas
  3. a cliffhanger ending where dragons rise from the ocean and we’re pretty sure they aren’t supposed to (the “red sickness” after all is sometimes referred to as the “draconic plague”)

After analyzing this chapter, here’s what I’ve taken away from it as a writer:

  • keep in mind Kevin Hearne’s advice: start with something that inspires curiosity and keep doing that
  • remember that the reader doesn’t expect to learn everything in this first chapter, so be picky with the details
  • show what the characters are like through their decisions

If I were to offer any critique for this opening chapter, it would revolve solely around the writing style, which I thought lacked a cohesive atmosphere, sensory details, and concise language. But for the way she snags the reader and begins developing the conflict, this is a solid beginning that prompts the reader to keep going.

I chose The Priory of the Orange Tree by Samantha Shannon because it was close at hand. If I were to pick my favorite opening chapters, I’d recommend The Scorpio Races by Maggie Stiefvater, Howl’s Moving Castle by Diana Wynne Jones, and Harry Potter and the Sorcerer’s Stone by J.K. Rowling.

What first chapters inspire your curiosity? Share in the comments!

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Saturday Check-in: critiques, writing schedules, and The Hobbit

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Why hello there my lovely fellow story seekers!

It has now been just over two weeks since my last day working as a children’s bookseller at my local indie bookstore. I worked there over a year and adored it. I gave this job up in order to focus on moving onto a job that will allow me to move 1,000 miles away and have complete control over my schedule. But I was absolutely terrified. Why? Because change is scary and because this change involved testing the integrity of my newly developed self-discipline skills.

I know this about myself: I’m inclined towards laziness. And yet lack of productivity drives me crazy. Having a job outside my home was a perfect compromise and now that safety net was being removed. Could I create my own schedule and stick to it?

Two weeks into it and the answer is, surprisingly, yes.

But I can’t stop to congratulate myself now. I’ve got to keep my head down and power on.

I got my critiques back this week

Quick background info: I took every workshop available to me in undergrad and before that, I had a critique partner. The critique element of this MFA program is not unfamiliar to me. Personally, I’ve got a decently thick skin.

But critiques still kinda suck.

These in particular sucked because it reinforced everything I already knew was wrong with the chapter: which was, in fact, everything. (Okay, I’m being melodramatic.) After a year in this program, I’ve drafted the first two acts of my thesis novel, putting me at a pretty 75,000 words so far. My latest submission is the first chapter in act 3. An act 3 that I’m drawing a blank on.

My biggest storytelling fault right now? Creating meaningful tension that rolls from scene to scene to build to the climax.

The worst part about getting critiques is when you agree there’s something wrong, but you have no idea how to fix it.

How do I figure out act 3?

I’m seriously asking. I’ve got a stack of how-to writing books on my desk right now about plotting and I’m not convinced I’ll find an answer to my question in any of them.

My current plan of attack: phoning a friend. I’ve set up a Skype call with my old critique partner and we’re going to put our heads together over this issue I have with plotting out act 3.

I am a plotter. I enjoy plotting, but the ending of this novel has eluded me for years. This little issue of plot isn’t new; it’s been with me since inception of this idea five years ago.

How do you tackle tricky plot endings?

So many pages, time enough?

I’m contracted to only turn in 15 pages every month, but “with the expectation of 45.” Being a people-pleaser, it tore me up to only turn in 15 pages last month and I’m determined to hit that 45 for August.

What helps me with big deadlines like this is knowing what that looks like on a daily basis. So let’s bust out our calculators, shall we? Math actually CAN be useful, quelle surprise.

The deadline: 45 pages by August 30

45 pages = ~13,500 words

I only want to work Monday thru Friday. So that leaves 15 full days to work.

13,500 words/15 days = 900 words

900 words = ~3 pages

3 pages is a very manageable amount for me–so long as I know what I’m going to write. Perhaps this is being dramatic (plot twist: I am being dramatic), but I fear that the success of my 45-page goal hinges on this chat with my old critique partner because otherwise… (dun dun dunnnn)

Cross your fingers for me, fellow story seekers!

Blog recap

This week, I published six posts:

Currently Reading

If you follow me on Instagram, you know I had no business going to the library when my current tbr pile is literally too high to stack on my shelf. You hear that? I’m double-parking books now.

But I went to the library anyway.

Aaaaaand I may have gone to Half Price Books and picked up Three to Get Deadly, Four to Score, and The Heist by Janet Evanovich 👀

But I’m only actively reading a portion of my tbr stack. Here’s what I’m actively reading, the titles you’ll find on my currently reading shelf on Goodreads:

  • Muse of Nightmares by Laini Taylor (as astonishingly beautiful as Strange the Dreamer)
  • The Priory of the Orange Tree by Samantha Shannon (oof burglars are safe from this only because it’s too heavy to lift to smack them with)
  • Seven Tears into the Sea by Terri Farley (a reread from ages ago, a perfect end of summer read, especially if you like selkie stories)

What I finished this week

On a whim, I read Tuck Everlasting by Natalie Babbitt and I will most definitely write a post about it soon because it is incredibly well written and plotted and I can’t believe I didn’t like it much as a kid.

I also watched The Hobbit: The Desolation of Smaug and The Hobbit: The Battle of Five Armies and loved them. I’ve recently found myself a pretty decent Tolkien fan after reading The Hobbit for my Fantasy Classics class last semester and then Fellowship of the Ring on my own this summer.

^ my Tolkien fan friends when they found out I was reading The Hobbit and watching all the LotR movies

Tell me about your week!